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The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The tables display the temperatures and hours of daylight in two countries, London and Sydney
in
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at
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 the same weekend in December 2018 from
28th
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the 28th
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 -
30th
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the 30th
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 of December 2018.
Overall
, it clearly can be seen that London
annd
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and
UK
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the UK
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 had a total
different
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difference
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 in every
aspects
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such
 as temperature degree,sunrise, and sunset time. In
the
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apply
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terms of the features in London, the temperature started at 9
derajat
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degrees
 celcius
in
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on
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 the first
day
, and
next
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the next
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in
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on
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 the second
day
 increased to 13, before
went
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going
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 down
in
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on
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 the
last
day
.
However
, the sunrise started at 05.45 and
remain
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remained
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 stable
in
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on
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 the second
day
, and after that
steap
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step
 back a
minutes
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few minutes
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in
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to
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30th
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the 30th
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.
While
 the sunset
are
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is
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 relatively stable until the
last
day
. Regarding
to
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the all features in Sydney,
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the tempature
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tempature
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temperature
in
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on
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28th
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the 28th
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 had a maximum
in
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of
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 26
derajat
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degrees
 celcius, and it
experienced
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apply
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a
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apply
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remain
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remained
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 stable until
30th
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the 30th
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.
Moreover
, the sunrise and sunset
is
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are
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 relatively stable until the
last
day
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words day with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • temperatures
  • hours of daylight
  • comparison
  • London
  • Sydney
  • December 2018
  • weekend
  • information
  • data
  • summarise
  • select
  • report
  • features
  • analysis
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