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IELTS Writing Task 1: 'modes of travel' answer The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. m Average distance in miles traveled per person per year, by mode of travel

IELTS Writing Task 1: 'modes of travel' answer The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. m Average distance in miles traveled per person per year, by mode of travel
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The table
showed
Wrong verb form
shows
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 information about
travel
Use synonyms
 in England and
table
Correct article usage
the table
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given
Add the auxiliary verb
gave
has given
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average
Correct article usage
the average
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 distance per person between 1985 and 2000. As the data represented
travel
Use synonyms
 distance by car is the highest average
about
Change preposition
of about
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 3100 miles in 1985 and the lowest average
travel
Use synonyms
 in
same
Add an article
the same
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 year using taxis.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, the average distance slightly increased to 4809
mile
Change to a plural noun
miles
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 in 2000 when cars were used to transport which
mean
Correct subject-verb agreement
means
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 people
were
Unnecessary verb
apply
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depended upon cars during that period of time. The train service was increased between these years because development of new rail lines of transportation.
On the other hand
Linking Words
 , local
bus
Fix the agreement mistake
buses
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 were reduced
of using
Change preposition
in use
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, it might other services fast and comfortable to
travel
Use synonyms
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words travel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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