Cheaper airfare has increased air travel in the last decade and it has positive effects on nations as per some while others disagree. Discuss both the views. Give your opinion

These days,
travel
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the travel
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and
tourism
industries are constantly
in-demand
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in demand
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due to
higher
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the higher
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frequency of international and national trips.
Due to
continuous competition, these industries have dropped their prices to attract customers. I believe
this
has positive effects on
nations
and
this
essay will outline examples and a conclusion to support my view.
Firstly
,
Due to
cheap
air
travel
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travel,
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there is a drastic increase in
number
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a number
the number
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of travellers as more
people
now can afford the prices of
air
travel
. There are many countries where there is only one way to reach and
that is
via
air
travel
and it has
became
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become
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more
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apply
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easier for
people
to
travel
to
those kind
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that kind
those kinds
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of countries.
For example
, there is a heritage place in India and there is only one way to reach there.
Hence
, due
cheaper
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to cheaper
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air
travel
, more
people
can visit that place and that increases
over all
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overall
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tourism
of
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in
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the country. There are many other ways through which
air
travel
has positive effects on the
nations
like increasing
tourism
, popularity, attracting international
audience
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audiences
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and affordable
travel
.
On the other hand
, many
people
believe that
this
has a negative impact on
nations
. Many
people
also
believe that cheaper
the
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apply
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travel
means
cheaper
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a cheaper
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the
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apply
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country.
For example
, a recent survey shows that many
people
avoid visiting
the
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a
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country with cheaper
travel
expenses because they think that the nation is
under developed
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underdeveloped
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. In conclusion, I strongly believe that cheaper
air
travel
has positive impacts on
nations
like increase in
tourism
, increase in foreign income and pocket friendly.
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