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Cheaper airfare has increased air travel in the last decade and it has positive effects on nations as per some while others disagree. Discuss both the views. Give your opinion

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These days,
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travel
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 and
tourism
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 industries are constantly
in-demand
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in demand
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due to
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higher
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 frequency of international and national trips.
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 continuous competition, these industries have dropped their prices to attract customers. I believe
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 has positive effects on
nations
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 and
this
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 cheap
air
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travel
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 there is a drastic increase in
number
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a number
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 of travellers as more
people
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 now can afford the prices of
air
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travel
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. There are many countries where there is only one way to reach and
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 via
air
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travel
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 and it has
became
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more
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easier for
people
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 to
travel
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 to
those kind
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 of countries.
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, there is a heritage place in India and there is only one way to reach there.
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, due
cheaper
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to cheaper
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air
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travel
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, more
people
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 can visit that place and that increases
over all
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overall
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tourism
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of
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 the country. There are many other ways through which
air
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travel
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 has positive effects on the
nations
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 like increasing
tourism
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, popularity, attracting international
audience
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audiences
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 and affordable
travel
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.
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, many
people
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 believe that
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 has a negative impact on
nations
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. Many
people
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also
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 believe that cheaper
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travel
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 means
cheaper
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a cheaper
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the
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country.
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, a recent survey shows that many
people
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 avoid visiting
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 country with cheaper
travel
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 expenses because they think that the nation is
under developed
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underdeveloped
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. In conclusion, I strongly believe that cheaper
air
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travel
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 has positive impacts on
nations
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 like increase in
tourism
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, increase in foreign income and pocket friendly.
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Content
Continue to support your ideas with relevant, specific examples. Including diverse examples can make your argument even stronger.
Grammar
Be mindful of your grammatical range and accuracy. Small errors can detract from the clarity of your argument.
Structure
Maintain the balance between both views before presenting your opinion for a well-rounded discussion.
Structure
Your essay is well-structured, with clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, contributing to high scores in logical structure and presence of introduction/conclusion.
Content
You've effectively presented and supported your main point of view which enhances the clarity and persuasiveness of your argument.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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