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The charts below show the result of surveys asking undergraduates and postgraduates why they chose Vaster university. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the result of surveys asking undergraduates and postgraduates why they chose Vaster university. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart displays the
reason
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reasons
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 why respondents wanted to study at Vaster
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university
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University
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 not only undergraduates but
also
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postgraduates
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 emphasized
on
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apply
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the reputation of
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university
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the university
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 the most,
while
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availability
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the availability
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 of accommodation was the least cause. There were more people who wanted to get
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a master
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master
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master's
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 degree caring about cost. Looking at the diagram in more detail, there were 36% of
postgraduates
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going
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went
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 to Vaster
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university
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University
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 because of cost, which was
two thirds
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 times higher than undergraduate
students
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 (24%).The number of undergraduate pupils who paid attention to
reputation
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the reputation
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 of
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university
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the university
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 was just 30%, which was the first consideration for postgraduate
students
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 (42%). Only 7% of postgraduate
students
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 made the decision to enter the
university
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 based on personal recommendation, which was significantly lower than the figures for undergraduate
students
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. Location seems to affect undergraduates to a larger extent with 10% which was almost double the rate for
postgraduates
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. The least effect for both undergraduates and
postgraduates
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 was the possibility to find satisfied accommodation, with 9% and 7%, respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words university, postgraduates, students with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prevalent reasons
  • academic reputation
  • campus facilities
  • location
  • course offerings
  • financial considerations
  • tuition fees
  • scholarships
  • undergraduates
  • postgraduates
  • influence
  • attract
  • appeal
  • significant
  • crucial
  • investigating
  • analyzing
  • comparison
  • impact
  • social aspects
  • determining
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