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The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart below shows information about the country of birth of
people
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 living in
Australia
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 and the table illustrates where
people
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 born in these
countries
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 live.
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, there are 5
countries
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, and the percentage of
people
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 who live in cities and rural areas is in the table. There are 5
countries
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 in the pie chart either, and one section is "other". We
also
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 have the percentage of the country of birth of
people
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 living in
Australia
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. The country of birth of
people
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 living in
Australia
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 is 100% in the pie chart. 73% is Australians, 14% is the Netherlands, and other sections of
countries
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 like the UK, New Zealand, and China account for 7%, 3%, and 2%. We have 5
countries
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such
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as UK,
Australia
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, China, New Zealand, and the Netherlands in the table. A lot of
people
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, exactly 99% of them live in cities in China. Only 1% of citizens live in rural areas. 90-99% of
people
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 in all
countries
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 live in cities. 1-20% of
people
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 live in rural areas in all
countries
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 94%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, australia, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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