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The charts below show the result of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reason why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.

The charts below show the result of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reason why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.
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The charts indicate the results of the survey on adult education. The bar chart illustrates the reason why the adults would like to
study
, and a bunch of adults want to
study
 because of their interest in subjects.
Moreover
, some
people
 want to
study
 for socializing. The pie chart depicts
people
's opinions about the cost-sharing of adult education. The number of
people
 who argue the cost
have
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 to be charged for individuals accounted for the major part. The rate of
people
 who want to
study
 because of their interest and who obtain qualifications recorded 40% and 38%, respectively.
Furthermore
, 22% of
people
 replied they want to
study
 since it is helpful for their current occupation. The rate of
people
 who have a purpose for improving their prospects or promotion and enjoying learning was recorded at less than 15%. Some
people
 think the expense of adults' education should be divided. Those
people
 figured a total of 60%. 35%of
people
 thought it should be split with the employer, and 25% of
people
 argued that the taxpayers have to help pay together.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words study, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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