The charts below show the result of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reason why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.

The charts below show the result of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reason why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.
The bar chart encapsulates the contributing factors that have influenced adults’ decisions to
study
,
while
the pie chart illustrates the ideal notion
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how the tuition fee should be apportioned in society.
Overall
, the majority of respondents share their learning purpose because keen on studying the subject. As for the fund, the survey
reveal
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the one who has the biggest responsibility to pay
their
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study
is
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are
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those who decide to enroll in a course.
According to
the bar chart, having
interest
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an interest
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in particular
subjects
seem
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seems
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to predominate the decision of 40%
adults
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of adults
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to take courses. Following that reason, the desire to gain qualifications comes as the second biggest
contributors
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to 38% of them.
Moreover
, there are 22% of adult people
who
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see that continuing their
study
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studies
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can be helpful for their current job. Meanwhile, the ambition to improve prospects of promotion
as well as
desire
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the desire
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to learn or
study
are chosen by 20% of adult respondents as their
study
reasons.
Finally
, only less than 15% admit that their
study
aims are
due to
their expectations to have a career shift and meet other people, which accounts for 12% and 9%, respectively. Regarding
to
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the tuition fee, it can be seen from the survey that 40% of funds should come from those who
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themselves in the course,
whereas
35% of it must
bepaid
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be paid
by the employer.
Finally
, the rest of the fees should be
aided
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by taxpayers.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words study with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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