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The flow chart illustrates the consequnces of deforestation. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The flow chart illustrates the consequnces of deforestation. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The flow chart illustrates the impact of logging. In
this
 flow chart you can see that
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the
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deforestation is divided
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into
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to
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 four directions “heavy logging equipment”, “fewer roots hold”, “increased risk of burnings” and “
plantrs
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planters
plants
 return less moisture to air”.
Firstly
, you can see that heavy logging equipment causes soil
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to more
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more
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move
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 hard and backed
subsequently
,
because
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and because
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 of
this
, rainwater drains and creates flooding.
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the accompanying consequence of logging is that there are fewer roots to hold together. Leading to soil erosion. The third effect of deforestation is caused
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a
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 big risk of burning which can lead to waste wood
therefore
its
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it
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lead
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leads
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scarce
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a scarce
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 of
micro-organism
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micro-organisms
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 which is the main reason
of
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for
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degradation
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the degradation
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 of vegetation
hence
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are
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 less biodiversity. The
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final
fainal
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final
 result of
this
 is less moisture
to
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in
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air
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the air
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 from plants which
contribute
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contributes
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 to less precipitation after a big risk of drought
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