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More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in a foreign country. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks?

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It is true that the number of
students
 preferring studying abroad
than
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 in their own
country
 increases each year.
While
 there are some drawbacks
of
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 studying in a foreign
country
, I still believe that these cannot overshadow the benefits. On the one hand, studying in an international setting can bring out some obvious disadvantages.
Firstly
,
students
 will have to live on their own, which means they will be alone in a foreign
country
. When you have nobody you can rely on, ask for
a
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help or just talk to,
this
 makes a
person
 feel a bit depressed. For a foreign student, it is much harder to stay psychologically stable.
Secondly
, international
students
 will have to get used to the
country
's culture and traditions. They will face
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a problem which is
also
 known as culture shock.
On the other hand
, I still believe that the advantages of experiencing international education outweigh the disadvantages. First of all, a new
country
 means broadening a
person
's horizons and getting new experience. Foreign
students
,
for instance
, can practice speaking non-native languages and upgrade their communicative skills and ability to find an approach to people from different countries.
Secondly
, being a foreign academic helps
to
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 become more independent.
For instance
,
while
 moving to another
country
person
 will have to negotiate with a lot of people about flats, education
and
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finding jobs, buying products and budgeting his or her income. In conclusion, it seems to me that studying abroad has more merits than demerits, especially
it
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 makes
person
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 more self-organised.
As a result
,
students
 become mature and understand what it is the real life and how to solve problems by themselves.
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Coherence & Cohesion
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Task Achievement
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Coherence & Cohesion
You've effectively structured your essay with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, making your argument easy to follow.
Task Achievement
Your essay presents a balanced view, thoroughly examining both the benefits and drawbacks of studying abroad, which directly answers the essay prompt.

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  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • opportunities
  • personal growth
  • development
  • exposure
  • diverse
  • perspectives
  • language skills
  • job prospects
  • adapting
  • environment
  • financial considerations
  • costs
  • homesickness
  • social isolation
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