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The graph below shows the hours of teaching per year done by each teacher in four different countries in 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the hours of teaching per year done by each teacher in four different countries in 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart illustrates the annual number of
hours
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tutor
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tought
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taught
thought
 in three
level
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 of
educating
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 including Primary, Lower Secondery, and Upper Secondery for four various
country
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 consisting Japan, Spain,
Oceland
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Iceland
, and
USA
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the USA
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during
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in
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 2001.
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, the comparison among the different levels of teaching states that in
this
 one-year period of
study
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 all educating
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horse
hours
course
which
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in which
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 teachers carried out their main duty were
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increased
 in each selected country by
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raising
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 the age of students.That means the most
hours
 of teaching have been done by
highschool 's
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 teachers in all four
contries
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countries
. A rapid glance shows
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that, Total
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the total
 amount of
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tutoring
 time in
USA
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the USA
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standed
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stood
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 at the top place among selected nations
by
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 about 1,550
hours
 per year,
while
 Japan had the least teaching
houres
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totally
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total
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 with teaching
hours
 of approximately 1,950 . Focusing on details reveals that the greatest
diverse
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 between
elementry
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elementary
 and higher levels teaching time was in Iceland by around 300
less
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hours
 in elementary and high
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schools
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 meanwhile
this
 difference was subtle in Japan as the most
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thinly
tiny
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual hours of teaching
  • teaching workload
  • educational systems
  • teacher-student ratio
  • significantly
  • slightly
  • noticeably
  • gap
  • highest/lowest number of hours
  • compare
  • contrast
  • reflect
  • variations
  • distribution of teaching hours
  • average
  • respectively
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