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The graph below shows the proportion of types of magazines sold by the company in 1975, 1995 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and Reporting the main features then make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the proportion of types of magazines sold by the company in 1975, 1995 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and Reporting the main features then make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram above illustrates the percentage of different types of
magazines
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 sold in 3 years 1975, 1995 and 2015.
Overall
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,
while
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sports
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magazines
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 are the bestseller, the opposite was seen in
food
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. Standing at 32%,
sports
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 magazine was the most popular in 1975, followed by
health
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,
others
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,
fashion
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 and
food
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 with 26%, 26%, 23% and 10% respectively.
Health
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 and
others
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 are equal to each other with 26%,
while
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sports
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 equals
two third
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two-thirds
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fashion
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 and triple
food
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. After 20 years, the proportion of
sports
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magazines
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 sold increased, from 32% to 41%.
Similarly
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, the rate of
others
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 and
food
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 roses, with 5% and 13% respectively.
Conversely
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, the percentage of
fashion
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magazines
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 and
health
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 sold slightly dropped.
At the end
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 of the period, the rate of
sports
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magazines
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 grew sharply compared to the start, from 32% to 42%. Oppositely, the proportion of
food
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,
fashion
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 and
others
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 decreased significantly.
Additionally
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, the rate of
health
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magazines
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 sold remained unchanged.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words magazines, sports, food, health, others, fashion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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