Your English-speaking friend has asked for your help with a college project he/she is doing about celebrating New Year in different countries. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • say how important New Year is to people in your country • describe how New Year is celebrated in your country • explain what you like about New Year celebrations in your country

Dear Nick I hope you and your family doing well. Now I am going to write
you
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to you
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about how the New
Year
is important in our
country
. In our
country
celebrating New
Year
is important
cause
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because
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we love to celebrate
this
holiday
Also
this
special holiday in our
country
. Now I'm going to describe how we celebrate. Always before ten or fifty days before New
Year
starts, we start to decorate our main Christmas tree with all the people from our city
this
tree will be located near to government so we decorate the trees located near the government. We
also
go to our relatives'
houses
and
neighbors'bors
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neighbours
houses
and meet them in our house
to
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too
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. Our
country
have
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has
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one tradition.
This
tradition is
yo
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to
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make
a
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an
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olive salet. Now I am going to explain what
the
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most I like
in
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about
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New
Year
. The most I like is going to our neighbour's
houses
and relatives'
houses
and
also
meeting them at our
houses
Yours sincerely, Islam
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Task Achievement
Provide clear and specific examples when describing celebrations to enhance detail and interest.
Coherence & Cohesion
Check for minor spelling and grammatical errors to enhance clarity, e.g., 'neighbors'bors' should be 'neighbors', 'yo make a' should be 'to make an'.
Coherence & Cohesion
Consider using a wider range of linking phrases to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs.
Task Achievement
Effective introduction of New Year's importance in your country.
Coherence & Cohesion
Clear structure with separate paragraphs for each main idea.
Task Achievement
Warm and personal tone, suitable for a letter to a friend.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • significant
  • reflection
  • goals
  • loved ones
  • fireworks
  • gatherings
  • traditions
  • public events
  • religious ceremonies
  • festive atmosphere
  • reconnect
  • exchanging gifts
  • resolutions
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