Your English-speaking friend has asked for your help with a college project he/she is doing about celebrating New Year in different countries. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • say how important New Year is to people in your country • describe how New Year is celebrated in your country • explain what you like about New Year celebrations in your country
Dear Nick
I hope you and your family doing well. Now I am going to write
you
about how the New Change preposition
to you
Year
is important in our country
. In our country
celebrating New Year
is important cause
we love to celebrate Correct word choice
because
this
holiday Also
this
special holiday in our country
.
Now I'm going to describe how we celebrate. Always before ten or fifty days before New Year
starts, we start to decorate our main Christmas tree with all the people from our city this
tree will be located near to government so we decorate the trees located near the government. We also
go to our relatives' houses
and neighbors'bors
Correct your spelling
neighbours
houses
and meet them in our house to
. Our Replace the word
too
country
have
one tradition. Change the verb form
has
This
tradition is yo
make Correct your spelling
to
a
olive salet.
Now I am going to explain what Change the article
an
the
most I like Correct article usage
apply
in
New Change preposition
about
Year
. The most I like is going to our neighbour's houses
and relatives' houses
and also
meeting them at our houses
Yours sincerely, IslamSubmitted by omondavlat91 on
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Task Achievement
Provide clear and specific examples when describing celebrations to enhance detail and interest.
Coherence & Cohesion
Check for minor spelling and grammatical errors to enhance clarity, e.g., 'neighbors'bors' should be 'neighbors', 'yo make a' should be 'to make an'.
Coherence & Cohesion
Consider using a wider range of linking phrases to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs.
Task Achievement
Effective introduction of New Year's importance in your country.
Coherence & Cohesion
Clear structure with separate paragraphs for each main idea.
Task Achievement
Warm and personal tone, suitable for a letter to a friend.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite