The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart describes the number of stores shut and opened in one country in a period of 7 years. It is noticeable that the amount of
shop
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shops
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opened and closed both met a decline throughout the
year
. The number of
shops
closed saw a dramatically fluctuate,
ranged
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from 7100 in 2013 to less than 1000 in 2018. It saw the most significant decrease between 2011-2012 to 4000
shops
, followed by a boost a
year
after ended at around 6000. After that, the number of
shop
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opened saw a trend of
declined
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decline
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with a slight increase in 2016-2017.
In contrast
, the
shops
that embraced an opening were more gentle during 2011-2018, which ranged from 8500 in 2011 to 3000 in 2018. After a slight decrease in 2011-2012 and a rise in the
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following
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followed
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following
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year
, the
shops
that closed dramatically
drop
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dropped
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to less than 1000 in 2015, which reached the bottom throughout the
year
.
However
, it bounced back to around 5000 in 2016, before it remained relatively stable in a period between 2016 and 2018.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words year, shops with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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