The two pie charts show the percentages of pollutants entering a particular part of ocean in 1997 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts show the percentages of pollutants entering a particular part of ocean in 1997 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The two pie charts show the percentages of pollutants entering a particular part of ocean in 1997 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart represents
amount
Add an article
the amount

The noun phrase amount seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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of
pollutions
Fix the agreement mistake
pollution

It seems that pollutions may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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than
Correct word choice
that

It seems that conjunction use may be incorrect here.

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entered
ocean
Correct article usage
the ocean

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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all values regarding
to
Remove the preposition
apply

The preposition to after regarding may be unnecessary. Consider removing the second preposition.

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organization reports in 1997 and 2007. The percentage of
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

pollution
Add an article
the pollution

The noun phrase pollution seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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that scored the highest
cased by
Verb problem
was

There may be a verb use issue here.

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air
pollution
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

with
Change preposition
at

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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30% and the lowest are for litter and farm waste about 4% these records were collected in 1997.
Furthermore
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

,
same
Change the article
the same

It appears that the phrase same study does not contain the correct article usage. Consider making a change.

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study found similar cases but different periods of time about
10years
Correct your spelling
10 years

If you don’t want 10years to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary.

after
first
Correct article usage
the first

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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readings. The results
were
Unnecessary verb
apply

The verb were appears to be unnecessary here.

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found that domestic sewage and air
pollution
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

same values
with
Change preposition
at

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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29% . The
numbers
Fix the agreement mistake
number

It seems that numbers may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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of
litters
Fix the agreement mistake
litter

It seems that litters may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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dropped to zero
percent
Change the spelling
per cent

The spelling of percent is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.

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compared to 10 years before. By the end of
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

research figured out several factors which could affect
environment
Replace the word
environmental

The word environment doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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pollution
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

and renewable sources can be perfect solutions.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words pollution with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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