The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given charts illustrate the percentage of households with electrical appliances in one nation

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and

number

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a number

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hours

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per week they

spend

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on housework per house during the

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of 1920 to 2019.

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, the percentage of houses that own

washine

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washing

machine

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machines

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refrigerator

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refrigerators

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and

vaccum

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vacuum

cleaners

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increased during the time

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;

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the number of

hours

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spent on house chores

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reduced over the same

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. In detail, the percentage of ownership of refrigerators

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nearly 0% in the

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1920 , and it

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climbed up rapidly during the next 40 years to 90% ,and

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, it followed a gradual increase to have refrigerators in every household in the

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1980.

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, in 1920 nearly 30 % of places

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owned a vacuum cleaner and that amount went up steadily with a slight reduction in

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from 1980 to have it in every household in the

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2000.

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although

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washine

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washing

machines were owned by nearly 40% in 1920 it had only increased to a level of

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65%

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of the time

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, the number of

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per week which had

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spent

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over

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house work

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housework

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was fell

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significantly from 50

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to 30

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during

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1920 to 1960 , and following it posted a gradual reduction to have only just above 10 working

hourse

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hours

per week in the

year

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2019.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, period, year with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "reduction" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

230 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

household appliances
time-efficient
labour-saving devices
technological innovations
ownership rate
housework chores
domestic workload
automation
advancements
trend analysis
societal shifts
economic impact
durability
lifespan of appliances
maintenance
historical comparison
time allocation
drudgery reduction
energy consumption
disruption in trends

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