SOME PEOPLE DO NOT LIKE CHANGES AND PREFET TO DO THINGS THEY ARE GOOD AT, WHILE OTHER PEOPLE LIKE TAKING RISKS AND TRYING NEW THINGS. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.
Some individuals
are prefer
traditional Change the verb form
prefer
life
and avoid trying new experiences
. While
others intend to obtain stunning
Correct article usage
a stunning
life
, take risks and find interesting
when Correct pronoun usage
it interesting
learn
new Change the verb form
learning
things
. However
, in this
article, I will discuss these two views and I
give my opinion.
Correct pronoun usage
apply
Firstly
, lots of people
are relaxed with their conventional life
. Moreover
, if these people
tried to get
new experiments, they would fear Verb problem
conduct
of
losing their properties and others. Change preposition
apply
In addition
, the ordinary life
is exercised by these individuals, lead
to Wrong verb form
leading
grant
the satisfaction and happiness Verb problem
apply
to
Change preposition
of
him
. Correct pronoun usage
them
For example
, our parents in past warned us about defied
Wrong verb form
defying
traditional
and Replace the word
tradition
encourage
us to obey rules. Without any doubt, Wrong verb form
encouraged
this
one
of the reasons makes those Add a missing verb
is one
people
to be
restricted by their Change the verb form
are
currently
Change the adverb
current
life
.
Fix the agreement mistake
lives
On the other hand
, some individuals attended
to disobey their ordinary days and find Verb problem
tend
interesting
Correct pronoun usage
it interesting
in doing
new Change preposition
to do
things
and experiences
. However
, some of these people
are completely interesting
Replace the word
interested
with
new Change preposition
in
experiences
. Furthermore
, if these people
gain new experiences
, they will be
lead Unnecessary verb
apply
him
to Correct pronoun usage
them
excited
Correct word choice
an exciting
life
. For instance
, a lot of discoveries and amazing changes in our life
are made through travelling and trying new Fix the agreement mistake
lives
things
.
To conclude
, the
balance between our traditional Correct article usage
a
life
and trying new experiences
is required. If person
Add an article
a person
the person
was not spend
years Change the verb form
did not spend
in
trying new Change preposition
apply
things
, he would probably stay in
the same point and not achieve any progress in his Change preposition
at
life
. However
, if individual
Add an article
the individual
an individual
was
completely changed his Unnecessary verb
apply
life
, he would probably lost
his civilization.Change the verb form
lose
be lost
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Structure
Ensure your essay has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. The introduction should broadly state what the essay will cover, and the conclusion should summarize your main points and opinion.
Cohesion
Try to organize your paragraphs clearly. Each paragraph should focus on a single main idea. Use transition words like 'however', 'furthermore', and 'for example' to connect your ideas.
Support
Develop your main points with specific examples. This helps to support your arguments and makes your essay more persuasive.
Grammar and Readability
Revise your essay to correct grammatical errors and improve readability. This includes punctuation, verb tense consistency, and sentence structure.
Task Response
Work on ensuring a balanced discussion of both views before presenting your own opinion. This includes providing a similar level of detail and analysis for each view.
Engagement
You engaged with the essay topic and attempted to discuss both views.
Organization
You made an effort to organize your ideas into paragraphs.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.
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