The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities.

The data given in the chart compares the medium degrees of weather on a monthly basis in Paris,

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and

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during that year .

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in

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increased gradually and it was

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as

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's figures ,

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, there was

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. As for Paris, at the beginning the degrees of weather decreased slowly ,

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,

at the end

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it went up significantly,

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and

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went down dramatically. As the line graph reveals,

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,

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's climate was becoming more hotter with under 20

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in January and there was a considerable rise until August to over 35

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, but its degrees declined quickly to above 20

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between August and December. Regarding the trends of Paris , the weather

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dropped steadily to above 10

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from January to July.

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to approximately 23

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.

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, the figure in January presents a moderate go up with some variations to 20

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exactly till July.

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, it remained at the same level of temperature in Celsius to about 25

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during July accurately.