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The number of international conferences in three cities. 1965-2010

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quantity
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 of international
conferences
 in some particular cities between 1965 and 2010.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that the number of international
conferences
 in
city
 A and
city
 B decreased significantly
while
city
 C witnessed
a
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growth throughout the period. Looking into detail, the figure for
city
 A and
city
 B started
with
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 35 and about 31 respectively in 1965. In the following years, they underwent fluctuations. In 1975,
city
 A had 20 global
conferences
,
then
 it soared until 1985, reaching
at
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30.
At the end
 of the 45-year period, the number of international
conferences
 in
city
 A and
city
 B declined to 20 and 25 respectively. As for the remaining
city
, international
conferences
 were not observed in
city
 C in 1965.
However
, the figure jumped sharply to approximately 28 in 1995,
then
 decreased
just
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 under 25 in 2005. In
subsequent
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 five years, the number of global
conferences
 reached 30.
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Effective Trend Analysis
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Comparative Language Use
You've made good use of comparative language to highlight differences between cities.
Clear Structure
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