The diagram below shows how glass is recycled.

The diagram illustrates a way in which glass is recycled.
Overall
,what stands out from the graph is that it is
cyclical
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process that
comprised
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several main stages
such
as washing,sterilising,crushing,melting and moulding. The procedure commences when people throw glasses into recycle bins after using them
some
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purposes after which they are loaded onto trucks and transferred to
treatment
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the treatment
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plant.After that,in plants,they are washed and made free from
bacteries
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bacteria
through the use of
washing
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a washing
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and sterilising machine.
This
is followed by crushing clean glasses using
pressing
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the pressing
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tool and melting them
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temperatures.
Then
,bottles in liquid form are poured into
bottle shaped
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container
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and
molded
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by a means of
special
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a special
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moulding machine.
Finally
,recycled glasses are transported to supermarkets and become available for consumers to utilize
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again and the process starts over again.
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