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The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given candle chart illustrates the current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP' for different European
countries
 for the
years
 2002, 2007 and 2012.
Overall
 there are percentages of Gross domestic products of 12 European
countries
. At first glance, it is shown that France in 2007 was the highest in the chart with
the
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a
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 percentage of 12,
in contrast
, all three
years
 in
the
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apply
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Estonia were the lowest in the graph by almost 3
percent
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per cent
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. Most importantly, Switzerland was at
peak
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its peak
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by
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in
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 all three
years
were
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the same
with
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at
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 11
percent
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per cent
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.
Moreover
, Luxembourg and
and
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apply
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Spain were almost
equally
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equal
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by
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to
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 8
percent
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per cent
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 which is
the
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apply
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modest in the chart.
Also
, Lithuania and Poland were second lowest
by
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in
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 its
health
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of health
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 Expenditure. By taking all the country, it is possible to tell its average is 8
percent
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per cent
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. By following the given 3
years
, the most dominant period was the
year
 2012 with 5
countries
shown
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showing
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pretty
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a pretty
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 high percentage. The
year
 that was at
the
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apply
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rock bottom was the
year
 2002, in
this
year
 most
countries
relatively
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were relatively
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 impacted less proportion
thant
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than
other
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in other
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 periods.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, years, percent, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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