The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in an European country bbetween 1979 and 2004

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in an European country bbetween 1979 and 2004
The line graph provides data about
consumption
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the consumption
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of Fish,
Chicken
,
Beef
, Lamb and
Chicken
, in European
country
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countries
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from 1979 to 2004.
Overall
, the red meat
consuming
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was decreased throughout the years, the
Beef
fluctuated
then
, severe decline over the period,
while
eating
Chicken
showed a significant increase
tread
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trend
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over all other lines,
in contrast
to fish which shows no change and steady
grow
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. In detail, around 150 grams of
Chicken
meat was guzzled in 1979,
then
a significant increase until it
reach
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reached
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300
gram
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grams
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at the end
of the period,
this
trend
surpass
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all other meats.
However
, the Fish line
was
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steadily declined from 1979 to 2004, which was the lowest in the rank. Moving to
eating
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eat
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Beef
and Lamb in 1979 the lines were topmost 230g and 150g respectively,
thereafter
the
Beef
line experienced
sudden
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a sudden
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drop,
while
in 1984 a rapid surge was shown followed by
gradual
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a gradual
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decrease until it
reach
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reached
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120g.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words chicken, beef with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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