The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in an European country bbetween 1979 and 2004
The line graph provides data about
consumption
of Fish, Add an article
the consumption
Chicken
, Beef
, Lamb and Chicken
, in European country
from 1979 to 2004.
Fix the agreement mistake
countries
Overall
, the red meat consuming
was decreased throughout the years, the Verb problem
apply
Beef
fluctuated then
, severe decline over the period, while
eating Chicken
showed a significant increase tread
over all other lines, Correct your spelling
trend
in contrast
to fish which shows no change and steady grow
.
In detail, around 150 grams of Replace the word
growth
Chicken
meat was guzzled in 1979, then
a significant increase until it reach
300 Wrong verb form
reached
gram
Fix the agreement mistake
grams
at the end
of the period, this
trend surpass
all other meats. Wrong verb form
surpassed
However
, the Fish line was
steadily declined from 1979 to 2004, which was the lowest in the rank.
Moving to Unnecessary verb
apply
eating
Change the verb form
eat
Beef
and Lamb in 1979 the lines were topmost 230g and 150g respectively, thereafter
the Beef
line experienced sudden
drop, Add an article
a sudden
while
in 1984 a rapid surge was shown followed by gradual
decrease until it Add an article
a gradual
reach
120g.Wrong verb form
reached
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chicken, beef with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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