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the two main graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in 1980 and 1990. Write a report describing the changes, at least 150 words.

the two main graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in 1980 and 1990. Write a report describing the changes, at least 150 words.
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The pie charts illustrate the proportions of five different
energy
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 supplies in the USA between 1980 and 1990. In both years, oil
energy
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 remained the main source, but the share
was
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dramatically dropped as more usage was coming from Nuclear
Power
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 followed by Coal
Energy
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.
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, the contributions of Hydroelectric
Power
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 and Natural Gas
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 at a similar rate in 1980 and in the next 10 years. In 1980, the ratio of Oil
Energy
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 was at 42% but was
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 to only 33% in 1990.
This
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 noticeable contribution shift happened because of a significant surge
of
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 Nuclear
Power
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 consumption that
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doubled from 5% in 1980 to 10% in 1990. Second to that, Coal
Energy
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 witnessed a 5% increment from 22% to 27% in the next decade.
On the other hand
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, Hydroelectric
Power
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continue
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continued
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 to have the same contribution at 5%
while
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 Natural gas
was
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slightly had a downturn
for
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 approximately 1%.
Consequently
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, in 1990, Coal
Energy
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 was the second highest
preffered
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preferred
energy
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 after
the
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Oil
energy
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,
surppasing
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surpassing
the
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Natural Gas for around 2% of the share.
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