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Some people think it is more important to plant more trees in open areas in towns and cities than provide more housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #plant #trees #areas #towns #cities
Mix
the
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nature
 and urbanism together is a great
ideea
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idea
.
However
, there are people to
belive
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believe
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 that
instead
 of building houses is better to plant more
trees
. I strongly agree with planting more
trees
 and
combine
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combining
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 crowded places with
the
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nature
. Now in our days, the cities are getting bigger and all the open areas are replaced by buildings,
while
the
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nature
 is almost
forggeten
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forgotten
. Replaced buildings with
trees
 can provide better oxygen, more
playgroung
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playground
 areas for children which are
more safe
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safer
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 and less busy.
Bring
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Bringing
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the
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apply
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nature
 and
the
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plants into the open area in the cities can really be an improvement when is
about
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to
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 the air.
On the other hand
,
to provide
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providing
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 more houses
instead
 of planting
trees
are
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is
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 more
expansive
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expensive
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 and does not contribute to a better atmosphere for our planet, because is already
strugguling
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struggling
 and the
most
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main
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 reason is the missing of
nature
 which is
replaced
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being replaced
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 by building cities and towns. In my opinion, balance is the answer, is good to
living
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live
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 in
the
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a
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 nice city but
in
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at
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 the same time we do not need to forget
bringing
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about bringing
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the
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apply
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nature
in
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into
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 our
daylife
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daily life
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 and
plant
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planting
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trees
everytime
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every time
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 we have a chance.
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structure
Try to structure your essay more clearly by having a distinct introduction, at least two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. This helps in enhancing the logical structure and flow of your arguments.
cohesion
Make use of transitional phrases to better connect your ideas and paragraphs. This will significantly improve the coherence and cohesion of your essay.
examples
Include more specific examples to support your points. This adds depth to your argument and improves task achievement.
grammar
Watch out for minor grammatical errors and typos, as they can slightly distract from your overall message. However, your ideas are understandable and engaging, which is commendable.
task response
You've successfully addressed the prompt by clearly stating your agreement with the argument for planting trees in urban areas. Your stance is clear throughout the essay, demonstrating good task achievement.
passion for topic
Your essay conveys a strong and passionate viewpoint, which adds a compelling aspect to your argument.
balanced argument
You've provided a balanced view by acknowledging the counterargument, yet reasserting your position effectively. This adds depth and complexity to your response.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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