Task 1: The diagram below shows one method of manufacturing ceramic pots.

Task 1: The diagram below shows one method of manufacturing ceramic pots.
The diagram illustrates the process of making ceramic
pots
. Generally, it contains
of
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11 steps, beginning with
collection
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a collection
the collection
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of the raw materials, and ending with
finished
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the finished
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pots
.
The first step is
digging to extract the pure substance and
then
it will be
deliverd
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delivered
by truck
into
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the factory.
Ath
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the factory and by using special machines the organic substance will be crushed
it
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into small items,
then
it is gonna be mixed with liquid to make a
mxtiure
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mixture
. After that the mixture will poured into moulds that have a pre-formed shape of
pots
and
allow
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to dry
fo
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for
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4-6 hours before being created into assembled clay
pots
, the next step
this
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moulds will be
tear
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aparts
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apart
parts
and the assembled clay
pots
will be removed. The
pots
will be baked in
oven
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the oven
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at 1000
dgree
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degree
degrees
celsius
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,
Additionally
, The
pots
will be stained and,
finally
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finally,
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the colour will be firing,
this
step will make the pot ready to use.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words pots with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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