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The diagram below shows one method of manufacturing ceramic pots.

The diagram below shows one method of manufacturing ceramic pots.
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The diagram illustrates the process of making ceramic
pots
Use synonyms
. Generally, it contains
of
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apply
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11 steps, beginning with
collection
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a collection
the collection
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 of the raw materials, and ending with
finished
Correct article usage
the finished
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pots
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.
The first step is
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 digging to extract the pure substance and
then
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 it will be
deliverd
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delivered
 by truck
into
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to
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 the factory.
Ath
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At
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 the factory and by using special machines the organic substance will be crushed
it
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apply
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into small items,
then
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 it is gonna be mixed with liquid to make a
mxtiure
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mixture
. After that the mixture will poured into moulds that have a pre-formed shape of
pots
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 and
allow
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allowed
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 to dry
fo
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for
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 4-6 hours before being created into assembled clay
pots
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, the next step
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this
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these
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 moulds will be
tear
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torn
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aparts
Correct your spelling
apart
parts
 and the assembled clay
pots
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 will be removed. The
pots
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 will be baked in
oven
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the oven
an oven
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 at 1000
dgree
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degree
degrees
celsius
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Celsius
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,
Additionally
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, The
pots
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 will be stained and,
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finally
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finally,
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 the colour will be firing,
this
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 step will make the pot ready to use.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pots with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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