Task 1: The diagram below shows one method of manufacturing ceramic pots.
The diagram illustrates the process of making ceramic
pots
. Generally, it contains of
11 steps, beginning with Remove the preposition
apply
collection
of the raw materials, and ending with Add an article
a collection
the collection
finished
Correct article usage
the finished
pots
.
The first step is
digging to extract the pure substance and then
it will be deliverd
by truck Correct your spelling
delivered
into
the factory.
Change preposition
to
Ath
the factory and by using special machines the organic substance will be crushed Correct your spelling
At
it
into small items, Correct pronoun usage
apply
then
it is gonna be mixed with liquid to make a mxtiure
. After that the mixture will poured into moulds that have a pre-formed shape of Correct your spelling
mixture
pots
and allow
to dry Wrong verb form
allowed
fo
4-6 hours before being created into assembled clay Correct your spelling
for
pots
, the next step this
moulds will be Correct determiner usage
these
tear
Replace the word
torn
aparts
and the assembled clay Correct your spelling
apart
parts
pots
will be removed. The pots
will be baked in oven
at 1000 Add an article
the oven
an oven
dgree
Correct your spelling
degree
degrees
celsius
, Capitalize word
Celsius
Additionally
, The pots
will be stained and, finally
the colour will be firing, Add a comma
finally,
this
step will make the pot ready to use.Submitted by wjdan.areeshi on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pots with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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