WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter - describe what you enjoyed about the course -say how much cooking you've done since the course - suggest another cookery course you'd like the school to offer

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing a letter to express my
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about
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the cookery course that
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had
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enrolled
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for
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6 months. Yet,
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was enjoying
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in
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cookery
school
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because
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had learnt about
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apply

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basic cooking skills.
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,
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also
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learned how to make mother sauces, which is the key to
become
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becoming

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a chef.
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was so fortunate to join your
cutenaly
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culinary

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school
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had learnt a lot of theory and skills for becoming a chef.
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,
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learned how to
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a knife and how to identify
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food poisons.
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am asking if your
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if
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it
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could
be offer
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offer

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more baking/
pastery
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pastry

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idea? because it could help other people who are interested
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baking and it could
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your
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more people
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. I appreciate your time and effort
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develop my skills as a chef. yours' faithfully, Tokateti Totoki

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Coherence and Cohesion
To further improve, try to organize your ideas more clearly and provide more details about each aspect. For example, instead of a general statement about learning basic skills and mother sauces, include specific examples or anecdotes to illustrate your points.
Task Achievement
It's great how you have responded to all aspects of the task. To enhance your response, consider giving more specific examples of your experiences and suggestions. For instance, sharing a particular dish you cooked after the course or explaining why a certain new course would appeal to students can make your letter more engaging and persuasive.
Task Response
You have successfully addressed all parts of the prompt in your letter. Your effort to cover the enjoyment of the course, post-course cooking activities, and a suggestion for a new course is commendable.
Tone
Your closing salutation 'yours' faithfully,' is appropriately formal and correctly used, fitting the letter's context well.
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