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The pie charts below compare household spending in the uk in 1980 with prediction for 2030

The pie charts below compare household spending in the uk in 1980 with prediction for 2030
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The given pie charts illustrate the comparison of
household
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households
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 in the United Kingdom in 1980, including predictions for the year 2030.
Overall
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, it can clearly be seen that the
percentage
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 of families spending on housing is going to be the highest in 2030.
According to
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 what is shown, in 1980 most UK families were spending most
their
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of their
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 income on food and drink and that
percentage
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 was 25%.
While
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 the second highest
percentage
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 was 22.5% and that was on housing, the difference between these two was only 2.5%.
Moreover
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, these two categories were predicted to be at 14% and 38%, respectively.
In addition
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, transport spending was the third highest proportion, and that was 21%. But in 2030 it will increase to 23%. Looking closely
to
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 the figures, one of the smallest
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percentage
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percentages
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of british
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british
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British
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 families
were
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expenditure
on
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in 1980 was electricity, gas and water
of
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 7%.
However
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,
this
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percentage
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 is not projected to jump significantly in 2030.
Whereas
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,
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 the spending on clothing and footwear
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 just 11.5% of their income, it will drop dramatically in the next 70 years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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