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The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countriesSummarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countriesSummarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
given
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bar chart compares the number of hours the students in three different
country
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countries
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 including
UK
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the UK
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, Japan,
Germany
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and Germany
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 spent on their normal activities
consist
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consisting
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 of sleeping,
studing
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studying
, and relaxing
during
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on
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 weekdayes.
Overall
, a rapid glance shows that the
highest
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most
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 time
spending
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spent
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 by
Japanist
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Japanese
 pupils
to study
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studying
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,
as well as
 the lowest one which did by them in order to relax .
Moreover
, the highest
differences
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difference
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 between
typical
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the typical
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 activities of students
is belong
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belong
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 to Japan.
On the contrary
, the learners in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom and Germany spent their day-hours on their routine habits approximately equal without any significant
discrepencies
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discrepancies
. Thirteen
houres
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hours
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 per day for Japenies educators
allocates
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allocate
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 for learning and they dedicate the less hours a day to calm down, which is 4 hours. These students divided their daytime to do their life practices very
unequaly
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unequally
unequal
inequality
, that 50 per cent of their day passes at school or by doing their
homeworks
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homework
 and they sleep for almost 70% of the other half,
finally
 rest and relax for
remain
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remaining
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 time. In
other
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the other
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 2 European countries, England and Germany, pupils care about all three daily
acitivities
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activities
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on averagely
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averagely
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average
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 in
similar
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the similar
a similar
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 way near to one-third of each weekday.
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