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The chart below gives information about Southland’s main exports in 2000, *20…, and future projections for 2025.

The chart below gives information about Southland’s main exports in 2000, *20…, and future projections for 2025.
#information #southland’s #exports #future #projections
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The bar chart illustrates the information
of
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 the main
exports
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 in Southland in 2000 and 20.. with
prediction
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 through 2025. The
exports
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 are categorized
in
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 three different types, International tourism, Dairy products, and Meat products.
Initially
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, in 2000, International tourism commenced at the highest point, with slightly over 8
billion
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.
Thereafter
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, it showed a minimal increase in 20.., with approximately 9
billion
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, before predicted to reach its pinnacle, with the maximum number of the given period, 10
billion
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, in 2025. The second-highest
exports
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, Dairy products, started with around 7
billion
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. The figure sharply increased to 10
billion
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 in 20.. .
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, in 2025, the number will
dropped
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 to nearly 9.5
billion
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, as forecasted.
On the other hand
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, Meat started with the lowest number, only 6
billion
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.
Then
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,in 20.., it witnessed a small decline
,
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 and was projected to decrease to 5
billion
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, in 2025.
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, it is apparent that international tourism accounted for the largest
numbers
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number
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 of
exporting
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while
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 the least
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exports
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 product is meat.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words exports, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Exports, main exports, projections, trends, significant changes, increased, decreased, speculate, external factors, global demand, technological advancements, trade policies, agriculture, technology, manufacturing, economic implications, employment, GDP, economic growth, global economic trends
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