The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart describes the different
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proportions
been
done with various electrical tools in a year between 1920-2019.
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usage
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machine
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machines
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refrigerator
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refrigerators
vacuum
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cleaner
in Fix the agreement mistake
cleaners
households
all saw a noticeable Use synonyms
raise
throughout the year.
Looking into more details, in 1920, Correct your spelling
rise
the
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households
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done
by washing Unnecessary verb
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machine
took the first place of these three Use synonyms
electical
appliances with 40 Correct your spelling
electrical
percents
of Fix the agreement mistake
percent
households
, followed by 30% of Use synonyms
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the refrigerator
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refrigerators
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vacuum
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the vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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, in 2019, all families use both Linking Words
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refrigerator
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refrigerators
vacuum
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cleaner
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cleaners
households
. Use synonyms
Instead
, only around 73% of families still use washing Linking Words
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machine
to do housework.
It is noticeable that, in 1920-1960, all three types of electrical appliances saw a Fix the agreement mistake
machines
rapidly
boost during the year, especially the Change the adverb
rapid
proportion
of families using Use synonyms
vacuum
cleaning, Use synonyms
raised
from 0 to 90% in 1960. The Verb problem
which increased
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usage
of it Use synonyms
were
still growing between 1960-1980. Change the verb form
was
Similarly
, the Linking Words
proportion
of the Use synonyms
usage
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refrigerator
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refrigerators
also
increased. Linking Words
However
, the Linking Words
usage
of washing Use synonyms
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machine
slightly declined from 70% to 65%. Fix the agreement mistake
machines
Furthermore
, the Linking Words
proportion
of Use synonyms
vacuum
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cleaner
remained stable at 100% Fix the agreement mistake
cleaners
in
1980 to 2019, when the Change preposition
from
proportion
of Use synonyms
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refrigerator
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refrigerators
finally
met and remained at 100% after a gentle increase Linking Words
in
1980 to 2000. At the same time, the Change preposition
from
usage
of Use synonyms
washing
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the washing
machine
slightly bounced back.Use synonyms
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, usage, machine, refrigerator, vacuum, households with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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