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Reading with your children: proper books vs tablets.

#children #books #tablets
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In today's cutting-edge era, the value of traditional paper-based
books
 is on a gradual decline.
However
, many parents are prioritising quality time with their children. They are making efforts to pass on the moral values they themselves absorbed from
books
 during their own childhoods. First and foremost, reading
books
 encourages kids to learn a wide range of vocabulary and language structures.
Whereas
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adults give small lectures to their toddlers
in
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a
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 concept of stories, kids tend to learn new words to start communicating with
the
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 surroundings.
For example
, youngsters
at
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 the range of age from 4 to 6
inclined
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 to use phrases that they had read in
fairy-tales
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fairy tales
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.
As a result
, the
brain
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 of juniors
is absorbing
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 new information via stories read by their parents.
On the other hand
, reading
fairy-tales
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 from proper
books
 affects the emotional intelligence of youth. As shown by recent articles, diving into the literature, emphasise and identify their own feelings towards the characters. In the case of teens at
age
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 of 15, reading the writings gives more emotions and reactions to the plot. In short, literacy consumption among offspring
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the
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interpersonal skills.
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Task Achievement
Ensure your essay directly addresses all parts of the task to fully meet the requirements. Your essay touched on the benefits of traditional books but did not fully explore the comparison with tablets.
Coherence & Cohesion
Work on developing a clear introduction that outlines your essay's structure and a conclusion that summarizes your main points. This helps in guiding the reader through your argument effectively.
Task Achievement
Incorporating specific examples strengthens your argument. Consider adding a comparison or analysis of reading with tablets to provide a balanced view.
Coherence & Cohesion
Your essay demonstrates a good logical flow and supports main points well. Maintain this coherence but enhance it with clear linking words and transitions between ideas for smoother reading.
Task Achievement
You effectively used examples to illustrate how traditional books impact children's vocabulary and emotional intelligence.
Coherence & Cohesion
Your essay benefits from a coherent structure that guides the reader through your discussion effectively.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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