The graph below shows the percentage of urban/suburban and rural households in a European country that had acces between 1999 and 2004.
The bar graph illustrates information about household
internet
usage in cities & villages in terms of percentage in a country, which is situated in Europe from 1999 to 2004.
Overall
, people who live in towns browse more internet
than the rural citizens. In both the
cases amount of users increased gradually.
City dwellers used almost 15% Correct article usage
apply
internet
in 1999. This
ratio of users tended to increase in the following years and reached almost 30%. Next two years this
increased with the same ratio, which became almost 40% and 50% in 2001 and 2002 respectively. After that steadily
increased rate Correct article usage
a steadily
wasfollowed
and Correct your spelling
was followed
finally
the percentage was almost 55%, which was the most for Add a comma
finally,
this
category.
People who live in country sides
accessed below 5% in 1999, which was the least number Correct your spelling
countrysides
users
. Change preposition
of users
This
rate of using the internet
grew with the progress of time, varying from almost 5% to 30%. Finally
, it reached almost 35% in 2004.Submitted by mokaddamul on
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