The world has many towns and cities constructed in previous centuries that were more suitable and livable for people in those time than they are now. What problems will this cause ? What can be done to solve these problems ?
A vast number
if
Correct your spelling
of
cities
and towns
were constructed in ancient time
. These were Fix the agreement mistake
times
best
Correct article usage
the best
places
to live for people . However
, these are not
longer suitable nowadays. Correct your spelling
no
This
is due to
the fact that these towns
and cities
lack public transportation
and essential modern facilities
such
as hospitals and schools. Hence
, lical
governments should release public Correct your spelling
local
transportation
vehicles and start to establish necessary facilities
.
To begin
with, the main causes of towns
and cities
are
changing for insufficient to live is that these areas are lacking of public transport and necessary modern Unnecessary verb
apply
facilities
. Therefore
, locals in these places
are complaining from
those and moving to Change preposition
about
others
parts of the country. Correct quantifier usage
other
For example
, Aswan city
in Egypt has
constructed and developed in old Verb problem
was
president
Nassar in Capitalize word
President
1900s
. Correct article usage
the 1900s
Nevertheless
, three fifth
people moved from the Change preposition
of fifth
city
to Cairo by fearing
Wrong verb form
because of fear of
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the difficulties
difficulties
lifestyle . Obviously, Aswan do not have any metroes and buses to travel in Replace the word
difficult
center
Correct article usage
the center
city
and some important public places
namely libraries and public parks. As a result
, majority
of locals Correct article usage
the majority
encouraged
to move to Add a missing verb
are encouraged
moden
areas .
Some possibilities to solve Correct your spelling
modern
this problems
are creating public Change the determiner
this problem
these problems
transportation
vehicles and establishing necessary building
. Fix the agreement mistake
buildings
For instance
, Turkish
government developed its Correct article usage
the Turkish
city
which is Bursa . In fact, Bursa is a very old city
that was not good
Correct article usage
a good
places
to live in Fix the agreement mistake
place
2000s
. Change the article
the 2000s
Thus
, the government began to establish bridges and roads for transportation
and built Bursa university
. Capitalize word
University
Consequently
, the city
is one of beautiful cities
today.
In conclusion, although
a number of cities
and towns
were constructed to live
people Verb problem
make
it
there , Correct pronoun usage
apply
still
it is not appropriate areas for locals by lacking public vehicles and modern buildings. Correct pronoun usage
they still
But
, governments can solve Correct word choice
However
this
problem by creating public transportation
roads and establishing necessary facilities
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