The world has many towns and cities constructed in previous centuries that were more suitable and livable for people in those time than they are now. What problems will this cause ? What can be done to solve these problems ?

A vast number
if
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of
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cities
and
towns
were constructed in ancient
time
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times
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. These were
best
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the best
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places
to live for people .
However
, these are
not
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no
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longer suitable nowadays.
This
is
due to
the fact that these
towns
and
cities
lack public
transportation
and essential modern
facilities
such
as hospitals and schools.
Hence
,
lical
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local
governments should release public
transportation
vehicles and start to establish necessary
facilities
.
To begin
with, the main causes of
towns
and
cities
are
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changing for insufficient to live is that these areas are lacking of public transport and necessary modern
facilities
.
Therefore
, locals in these
places
are complaining
from
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those and moving to
others
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other
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parts of the country.
For example
, Aswan
city
in Egypt
has
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constructed and developed in old
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Nassar in
1900s
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the 1900s
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.
Nevertheless
, three
fifth
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people moved from the
city
to Cairo
by fearing
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the difficulties
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difficulties
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lifestyle . Obviously, Aswan do not have any metroes and buses to travel in
center
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the center
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city
and some important public
places
namely libraries and public parks.
As a result
,
majority
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the majority
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of locals
encouraged
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are encouraged
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to move to
moden
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modern
areas . Some possibilities to solve
this problems
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these problems
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are creating public
transportation
vehicles and establishing necessary
building
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buildings
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.
For instance
,
Turkish
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the Turkish
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government developed its
city
which is Bursa . In fact, Bursa is a very old
city
that was not
good
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a good
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places
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place
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to live in
2000s
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the 2000s
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.
Thus
, the government began to establish bridges and roads for
transportation
and built Bursa
university
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University
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.
Consequently
, the
city
is one of beautiful
cities
today. In conclusion,
although
a number of
cities
and
towns
were constructed to
live
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people
it
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apply
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there ,
still
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they still
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it is not appropriate areas for locals by lacking public vehicles and modern buildings.
But
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However
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, governments can solve
this
problem by creating public
transportation
roads and establishing necessary
facilities
.
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