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The table below shows population figures for four countries for 2003 and projected figures for 2025 and 2050. (millions) Summarize the information by selecting and Reporting the main features then make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows population figures for four countries for 2003 and projected figures for 2025 and 2050. (millions) Summarize the information by selecting and Reporting the main features then make comparisons where relevant.
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The table below illustrates the
informations
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 about the numbers of population in 4 different nations and
expecting
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 in 2025 and 2050.
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, there are a lot of
defferents
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differences
 in the figures of these countries. As could be noticed
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that
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, the highest always belonged to
Indonexia
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Indonesia
 during 47 years. In 2003,
Indonexia
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Indonesia
 was the largest in population with 238
millions
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million
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, followed by 54
millions
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million
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of
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 Italy and
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the republic
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republic
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Republic
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 of Korea
at
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48
millions
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million
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.
Finally
, Argentina was the lowest, which was just one-seventh of the
Indonexia
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Indonesia
, at 34
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. Forecast in 2025 and 2050,
while
 Argentina,
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and Indonexia
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Indonexia
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Indonesia
 will experience
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 continuous significant increase, to 62 and 312
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million
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 respectively, these figures will double after nearly 5 decades,
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 opposite will see in
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Italy, which will witness a
sharply
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 decrease to 45 in the future.
Only
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the republic
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republic
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Republic
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 of Korea, after raising by 4
millions
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million
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 in 2025,
which
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will remain unchanged
this
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figures
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 until 2025.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words indonexia, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population figures
  • projected figures
  • significant increase
  • significant decrease
  • growth rate
  • decline
  • trend
  • highlight
  • compare
  • economic development
  • birth rate
  • migration patterns
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