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The bar chart shows information about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B.

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The bar chart illustrates the variety of
middle
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school
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 subjects which students in both
middle
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school
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 schools A and B are interested
.
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According to
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 the figure, it can be seen that the
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sport
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 subject is the most popular in
school
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 A.
While
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, Students in
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 B
were
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 intrigued to attend the craft and drawing class the most. In
school
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 A, a majority of
middle
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school
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 students are interested in
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sport
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 the most compared to the other subjects, which accounted for 36.
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, language interested
children
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 the least, only about 5, which is seven times less than
sport
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. Language and craft/drawing subjects are held by 5 and 4
children
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 respectively.
School
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 B, learners mostly attend to the art related subject, which about 25. Language
come
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 the second place with 18.
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, only 5
children
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 join
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the sport
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sport
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sports
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 class. The least enjoyed class for
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school
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 pupils is science, which has only 2
children
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 joined.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words middle, school, sport, children with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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