Teenagers nowadays spend a huge amount of time on social networking sites (such as Facebook). Some people think that these platforms adversely affect teenagers while others believe students can enjoy much of the network's benefits. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Social network sites
are become
popular among Change to the active voice
become
have become
the
Correct article usage
apply
teenagers
. Some people think that it bears disadvantage
for Correct article usage
a disadvantage
the
Correct article usage
apply
teenagers
while
others explain that it is beneficial for the
Correct article usage
apply
students
. This
essay agrees that spending much
Rephrase
too much
time
in
social networks Change preposition
on
giving
Verb problem
has
bad
Correct article usage
a bad
impacts
Fix the agreement mistake
impact
in
Change preposition
on
the
Correct article usage
apply
students
.
At
the beginning, by using social Change the preposition
In
media
teenagers
getting
attracted Wrong verb form
get
in
many fake things, addicted Change preposition
to
of
them and Change preposition
to
loosing there
valuable Verb problem
lose
time
which may they use
Wrong verb form
used
in
their studies. Facebook, Change preposition
for
Correct word choice
and Instagram
Instagram
are Correct word choice
and Instagram
the
prime Correct article usage
apply
example
Fix the agreement mistake
examples
Change preposition
of
in
which Change preposition
of
teenagers
Wrong verb form
spend
spending
too much Wrong verb form
spend
time
Change preposition
apply
for
gossiping, Change preposition
apply
Correct word choice
and share
Correct word choice
and share
share
their feelings and Wrong verb form
sharing
this
Correct subject-verb agreement
distracts
distract
them Correct subject-verb agreement
distracts
Change preposition
from
for
their real life Change preposition
from
as well as
Fix the agreement mistake
apply
some
Correct quantifier usage
apply
times
they Correct your spelling
Sometimes
engaged
Wrong verb form
engage
Change preposition
in
with
Change preposition
in
Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
relationship
via those Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
media
and unfortunately Correct your spelling
lose
loose
their golden builder Correct your spelling
lose
time
for their life
.It Fix the agreement mistake
lives
is
Change the verb form
is therefore agreed
therefore
agree that using social media
is not necessary for enjoying the time
.
On the other hand
, some people think that it is beneficial for their learning purpose. Although
it is right that social media
may help for
Change preposition
apply
students
some times
Correct your spelling
sometimes
but
learners should gain their knowledge Correct word choice
apply
other
educational websites or apps.Change preposition
through other
This
essay disagree
with Change the verb form
disagrees
this
because it is possible to getting
Wrong verb form
get
beneficial
without using social Replace the word
benefits
platfoms
.Correct your spelling
platforms
For example
, YouTube, google platform
and some other Fix the agreement mistake
platforms
media
help students
very much for their education purpose. It is possible to get all information
without social Correct article usage
the information
media
as nowadays there is available of online papers ,magazine
and Fix the agreement mistake
magazines
others
beneficial Correct quantifier usage
other
chanel
Correct your spelling
channels
.
In conclusion, Correct word choice
available.
while
the disadvantage of social media
speard
most around Correct your spelling
spread
the
Correct article usage
apply
teenagers
, some till
feel that it is open the learning opportunity Correct your spelling
still
amon
Correct your spelling
among
the
Correct article usage
apply
students
. However
, there are others
alternative learning Correct quantifier usage
other
source
in which they enjoy the opportunity especially Fix the agreement mistake
sources
teenagers
without using social sites.Submitted by tanakchakma55 on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
introduction conclusion present
Work on enhancing the clarity and structure of your introduction to better outline the essay's focus and scope.
supported main points
Try to add more specific examples and evidence to back up your points. This helps strengthen your arguments and makes them more convincing.
logical structure
Focus on organizing your essay in a more logical, clear manner. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea and follow logically from the one before it.
complete response
Ensure that your response directly addresses the question. Provide a clear stance and back it up with cohesive arguments throughout the essay.
clear comprehensive ideas
Enhance the clarity of your ideas by keeping paragraphs focused on a single idea and using transitional phrases to link ideas and paragraphs.
relevant specific examples
Integrate more relevant, specific examples to support your views. This will help illustrate your points more clearly and make your argument more compelling.
complete response
You've successfully discussed both views on the impact of social networking sites on teenagers.
introduction conclusion present
Your essay structure, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, is a good fundamental approach.
supported main points
You aimed to provide support for your main ideas, which is a key aspect of a strong argument.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:
...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?