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The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the development of cutting
tools
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 in the Stone Age.
This
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 essay will summarise the information by selecting and reporting
main
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the main
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 features.
Overall
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,
tool
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B
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's
side
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view
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 was
lighther
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lighter
 than
Tool
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 A's
side
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view
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.
Also
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, their height was the same like 5 cm. And the
Tool
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B
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 was bigger than
Tool
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B
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.
First,
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Tool
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 A's three
view
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 shapes were similar to each other. But,
Tool
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B
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's three views were not similar. The
side
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view
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 has changed over the 0.6 million-year period. Even though, the two
tools
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'
side
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 views changed,
other
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the other
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 sides of
that
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the
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 two
tools
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' have not changed well over the year in the question. And that
two
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the two
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tools
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's colors have changed. 1.4 million years ago the
tool
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's
color
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colour
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 was deep grey even 0.8 years ago the cutting
Tool
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's colour faded. The cutting
tools
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's shape has changed to sharper and added more crystals over the 0.6 million-year period.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tools, tool, b, side, view with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Stone Age
  • tools
  • cutting
  • development
  • rudimentary
  • sophisticated
  • progression
  • unworked pebbles
  • flake tools
  • bifacial tools
  • efficiency
  • materials
  • emergence
  • characteristics
  • functionality
  • craftsmanship
  • precision
  • hunting
  • carving
  • advancements
  • significance
  • human development
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