Reducing global environment damage should be handled by governments rather than individuals. To what extent agree or disagree?
It is argued that
for
reduce Change preposition
to
global
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the global
environment
government
take actions rather than individual one
. Correct pronoun usage
ones
This
essay agrees with this
statement that everyone
should be take
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take
the
part Correct article usage
apply
for
reducing environmental damage because it is a social responsibility for all and not only Change preposition
in
government
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the government
everyone
took
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takes
the
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apply
advantages
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advantage
on
the Change preposition
of
environment
.
In the beginning, as we are human being
we have some responsibilities to our Fix the agreement mistake
beings
environment
and society. Although
it is difficults
for individuals to reduce the damages Correct your spelling
difficult
but
it is not very hard if Remove the conjunction
apply
everyone
do
the Change the verb form
does
work
with sharing. People may create some group and start the work
for our society. For example
, individual
can start Add an article
an individual
the individual
the
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apply
work
from there
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their
house
by Fix the agreement mistake
houses
manage
their home dusting and if Change the verb form
managing
everyone
do
it , Change the verb form
does
the
reducing Correct article usage
apply
work
is more
easier for others.
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apply
Furthermore
, besides
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the government
government
we all took Add a comma
government,
the
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apply
advantages
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advantage
from
our Change preposition
of
environment
. A prime example is that we all breathing
and the oxygen Wrong verb form
breathe
come
from the Correct subject-verb agreement
comes
environment
so it is duties for all to keep the environment
fresh and safe. Government
should take some step
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steps
strickly
that they may give fine if anyone Correct your spelling
strictly
polluted
the roads or through rubbish openly. Wrong verb form
pollutes
Besides
, people must be aware about
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of
this
purpose.
In conclusion, reducing the global damage will not done without individuals helping . As we all taking
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take
the
benefits from our Correct article usage
apply
environment
it is responsible for all to keep it clean that
we get more extended Correct word choice
so that
thing
from our Fix the agreement mistake
things
environment
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