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Band 3.5

Robot and artificial intelligence are being developed to replace humans in the workplace.Why is this happening?Do you think this will have a positive or negative impact on society?

Some
people
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 believe that
robots
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 and artificial
intelligence
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 are being increased to replace
humans
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 in the workplace.
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 essay will explain why is
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 happening and why it will have
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 effect
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 society.
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 it is understandable that in the modern ages,technological equipment
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 increasing,
people
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 depend on it,
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works
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 to entertainment,cause
robots
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 and artificial
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work
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 more effectively than
humans
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works
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,about calculating
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,
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 or artificial
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 can
work
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 more correctly than
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 and
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 about abilities and
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,it developed so fast and
people
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 have no chance to race it,
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 why nowadays
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 depend on them and do not do it for themselves,it leads to their abilities slowly down and the flexible
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 decreased sharply.
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,
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 too much on technology can lead to losing our abilities and always being laziness,it will correct that
robots
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 and artificial
intelligence
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 can
work
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 fast and correctly as
humans
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 do but there
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 that
robots
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 or technology equipment can not do and
people
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 need to stand up and get back to their
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.
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,in the UK,many scientists explore that in
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 years
robots
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 and artificial
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 could replace
humans
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 workplace. In conclusion, increasing
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 and artificial
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 are some of the biggest breakthroughs
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humans
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for humans
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 in modern ages,beside that it could be a double-blade in human society.

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Use specific examples to support your points. These examples should be detailed and relevant to the argument you are making.
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task achievement
You engage with an important and relevant topic, which shows your ability to reflect on contemporary issues.
coherence cohesion
Your essay contains a clear position throughout, which is good for maintaining a coherent argument.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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