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The given bar chart indicates total spendings on health care as from percentage perspective of GDP in 12 European countires during the years of 2002, 2007 and 2012.

The given bar chart indicates total spendings on health care as from percentage perspective of GDP in 12 European countires during the years of 2002, 2007 and 2012.
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The given bar chart indicates total
spendings
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spending
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 on
health
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care
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 from the percentage perspective of
GDP
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 in 12 European
countries
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 during the years of 2002, 2007 and 2012. When looking at the chart at first glance it is obvious that Belgium and Switzerland had the highest expenditure on
health
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care
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 during the
10 year
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 period with 10 and over 10 percent of
GDP
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 respectively. In the meantime , compared to their peers Estonia and Lithuania had the least proportion of their
GDP
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 spent on
health
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 with below 6 percent for both of them. Over the Period there were some fluctuations during the years in some of the
countries
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. To illustrate
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 , France , Luxembourg and Netherlands experienced an increase in
health
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 investment
while
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countries
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 like Denmark , Poland , Slovenia , Lithuania and Norway reduced their
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health
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healthcare
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care
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spendings
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. The rest of the
countries
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 ( Belgium , Estonia, Spain and Switzerland ) did not change
their
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 proportion of their
GDP
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 spent on
Health
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care
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 over the years with rates of 10 , 3 , 8 and 11 respectively.
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 ,
it is clear that
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spendings
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 on
health
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care
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 differs significantly in 12 European
countries
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.
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 , the expenditure fluctuates during the period.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 93%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words health, care, gdp, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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