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The graphs indicate the source of complaints about the bank of Amenica and the amount of time takes to have the complaints resolved.

#graphs #source #complaints #bank #amenica #amount #time
The given charts
illustrates
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illustrate
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 the types of
complaints
 about an American bank and
average
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the average
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time
 invested
for
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in
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 solving these problems. Units are measured in percentages and numbers.
Overall
, what stands out from the graphs is that most of
protests
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the protests
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 were arisen from
public
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the public
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,
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apply
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while
 solving these issues
got
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took
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 more
time
 in 2001. Looking into detail, regarding
to
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the types of
complaints
,
public
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the public
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 ranked first with 63%, which is followed by government agencies at just above one in ten.
However
, protests which were made by
out of state
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out-of-state
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 were higher than that of insurance companies (10% and 8% respectively). The
percentages
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percentage
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 of
complaints
 made by bank employees, media and others
were
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was
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 8% in total. In terms of average
time
 spent on solving problems, the amount of
time
 invested
for
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in
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 resolving
complaints
 in 2000 was just below 6
months
 compared to that in 2001 with 6
months
.
Arround
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Around
 5
months
 were
alloted
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allowed
allotted
allocated
 to solutions in 2002 as opposed to 2003 and 2004 (around 5
months
 each).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words complaints, time, months with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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