The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children’s activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate. Write a report for a university lecturer and report the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children’s activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate.

Write a report for a university lecturer and report the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie graphs illustrate the proportion of cultural and leisure activities both
boys
and girls attend. Comprising the variety of sports, listening to music, computer games and reading.
According to
the figures, it can be seen that
boys
enjoy getting involved
computer
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in computer
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games and basketball.
While
the vast amount of girls are interested in dancing and reading. The main activity that
boys
participate in is computer games, which occupy nearly one-third of their activities. Basketball comes the second place with around one in four.
Additionally
, listening to music and skateboarding are roughly the same amount of male attendances, which are 10% and 11%.
Boys
are less intrigued at reading only accounting for 2%.
On the other hand
, girls are mostly interested in dancing, just over a quarter of their activities. Followed by reading with 21%. Listening to music and gymnastics participants are almost the same, about 10% and 11% respectively.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words boys with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • cultural and leisure activities
  • participation rates
  • gender differences
  • popular/preferred activity
  • percentages
  • contrasts/comparisons
  • similar interest levels
  • trends
  • significantly
  • unexpected findings
  • summarizing
  • key differences/similarities
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