The only way to improve safety on our roads is to give much stricter punishment for driving offences.To what extent do you agree/ disagree?
In recent years ,it has been reported that many deaths and injuries have been caused by negligence by safety
road
users. and some believe the only way to improvise such
situations is setting
harsh rules and regulations for Change preposition
by setting
road
offenders. In my own opinion, l completely agree that the laying down of these measures is the best way to curb such
incidences and will be explained below.
On the one hand , people do not like to cause accidents nevertheless
, situations are unpredictable therefore
mistakes will catch up with someone eventually. For instance
, robots may not be working or pedestrians may not paying attention to what is happening around them. For example
example
in Lublin , a lady was rushing to the university institute and she was hit by a car she did not notice that the traffic robots had changed to red.
on the other hand , individuals turn to be reckless unfortunately when they are driving either a car or cycling Remove the redundancy
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the rate of deaths Add a missing verb
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accidents is increasing day and night . some human beings are driving whilst they are drugs
or they even race on the Change preposition
on drugs
road
, especially teenagers. for example
, it is said that Paul Walker was racing when he died . Therefore
,if someone endangers others , he or she should be banned from driving thus
if they are drug , high or racing . secondly
, the fine should be increased this
will minimise the offences .
In conclusion, punishment of banning and increasing fines should be implemented to
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since other individuals are reckless when using the Remove the comma
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.In my own opinion, it is best to punish the people according to
the level of the offence.Submitted by teterayithelma on
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