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the graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in usa since 1980 with projections untile 2030

the graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in usa since 1980 with projections untile 2030
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The provided chart illustrates energy
consumption
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 in the USA from 1980 to 2030, based on a 2008 report.
Overall
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, it is evident that the
consumption
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 of petrol and oil, coal, and natural gas has increased steadily over time,
while
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 the
consumption
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 of nuclear, solar/wind, and hydropower has shown fluctuating or declining trends The
consumption
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 of petrol and oil has consistently been the highest, starting at 35
quadrillion
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units
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 in 1980 and projected to reach approximately 50
quadrillion
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units
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 by 2030.
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, coal and natural gas have shown upward trends,
although
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 coal
consumption
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 has remained relatively stable,
while
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 natural gas
consumption
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 has fluctuated.
In contrast
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, the
consumption
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 of nuclear, solar/wind, and hydropower has been lower
overall
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. Nuclear
consumption
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 has steadily increased from approximately 3
quadrillion
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units
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 in 1980 to around 8
quadrillion
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units
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 in 2008, with a projected increase to 11
quadrillion
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units
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 by 2030. Solar/wind
consumption
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 has shown some fluctuations but has generally increased,
while
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 hydropower
consumption
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 has fluctuated and declined over time
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, quadrillion, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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