People nowadays tend to have children at older ages. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, many of us, tend to have children at an older
age
,
however
; other
group
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of people think that an earlier
age
is better to have babies. I believe that
emotional
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and financial
aspect
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aspects
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of
this
trend force many couples to plan
baby
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later in their life because it is more beneficial for them. To commence with, mental health plays a vital role in
upbringing
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the upbringing
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a
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child. If
,
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parents are mentally ready for family planning, only
then
they can raise their offspring in а better way.
For example
; it is more common that the children of alcoholics are neglected and
then
indulge in illegal activities. Another advantage is that financially secure guardians can better support their newborn's health and expenses. It is
also
true that most
of
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the
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people become financially stable after the
age
of
thirties
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their thirties
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. Till that
age
, they become mature enough to tackle
with
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the basic needs of their child and to meet the expenses of their ongoing life. Despite all that; there are many challenges faced by
the
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couples at an old
age
in giving birth to a child. First and foremost is the maternal
age
and conceiving power of the mother, which decreases with the increasing
age
.
Moreover
; many other complications can be found in both of them.
For example
; sex hormones decrease in both genders after the
age
of thirties.
Secondly
, babies of
the
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older
age
couples often seen with rare disorders.
For instance
,
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an NT
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Scan
also
diagnose the mother's
age
in order to find a disorder in
baby
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the baby
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.
Therefore
, it is considered that reproducing at
the
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a
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younger
age
is better because both parents are in good health.
To Conclude
, having
offsprings
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offspring
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in
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at
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later
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a later
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age
has the benefits of fulfilling personal
as well as
financial needs in a better way and it
outweigh
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the physical disadvantages caused by 
age
 which sometimes
effects
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affects
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or not.
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