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The given table shows the percentage use of four different fuel types to generate electricity in five Asian countries in 2005

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The presented table compares the amount of four various
categoreis
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categories
 of
fuel
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 consumption in order to
electricity
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 production in five
country
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 of Asia in 2005.
Overall
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, the highest bulk of
fuel
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used
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is used
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 from Coal and
Lignit
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Lignite
sources
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 in Malaysia,
While
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 the lowest one
was belong
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 to Thailand for Nuclear power.
Additionally
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, the whole view of information shows that in all five
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countries
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countries,
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 non-renewable energies
drived
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drove
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 more rather than renewable types of energy
sources
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 to run
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electricity
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the electricity
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 production
proccess
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process
.
Malasia
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Malaysia
 and
Singapore
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Singapore's
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 direct withdrawal of natural fossil fuels resources
was
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the
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apply
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far many greater than others, at 61 and 62 per cent respectively,
while
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 the highest amount of produced fuels from oil and gas capitals
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were withdrown
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withdrown
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withdrawn
 by
Thiland
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Thailand
 with
the
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a
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 huge discrepancy rather than other
countries
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, at 36%. Japan use nuclear energy
mor
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more
that
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than
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 other
sources
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 for
electricity
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 generation with 49%. On the whole, these numbers addition to other unreplenished
sources
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for
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of
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fuel
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which
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used by other mentioned Asian
countries
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 had the greatest amount of
fuel
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 type usage among all others. The percentage of renewable energies
includ
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include
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 wind and water
reservior
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reserves
 stood at the least of
consumped
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consumed
consumer
 fuels among all five
countries
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,
although
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 South Korea tended to
this
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 type of moving power for their electrical industry, by 48
percentage
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. Japan and Singapore with three per cent of whole energy usage to produce
electricity
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was
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are
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 the smallest fans of
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this
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these
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 green
sources
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fuel, electricity, sources, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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