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The diagrams below show the water supply system in Australia present and in future. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagrams illustrate the
water
 supply
system
 currently works in Australia and the plans for future changes. In
this
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 I will summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
Overall
, the current
water
 supply
system
 illustrates the
waste
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wastewater
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water
 from the
city
 to
water
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the water
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 treatment plant and to
river
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the river
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.
And the
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The
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 present
water
 supply
system
 shows that pure
water
 is stored in a dam before being transferred to a
city
 to be used by households shops and factories. Regarding the future
water
 supply
system
, it can be seen that the storage of pure
water
 in the dam and the uses of it in the
city
 are the
as
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same as
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 the previous
system
.
However
, both the
storm
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stormwater
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water
 and waste from the
city
 are to be directed to the
water
 treatment plant for processing after which they will be recycled back for use in the
city
. It is planned that no
water
 will be released into the river.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, system, city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrate" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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