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People sleeps less than before in many countries. Why do people sleep less? What effects does it have on individuals and on society?

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Nowadays, decreasing quality time for energy recharging and relaxing on modern
people
 is an alarming situation around the world.
This
 essay will demonstrate about what are the reasons for
the
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sleeping issues and how
it
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they
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 directly
affects
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affect
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individuals
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individuals'
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health
as well as
 society.
People
 now tend to have less sleeping time and
this
 is
due to
 many reasons. The significant major causes of
this
 problem are the pressures of modern life.
People
 usually have a tendency to be caught in the worries concerning the future or regret concerning the past. When
people
 are worried and under stress can be very difficult to fall asleep and stay asleep the whole night. Not only that, many studies have mentioned that using smartphones until late at night could be a distraction factor, which is the blue light from technological devices screens that causes difficulty falling asleep. The effects of
this
 have been and will continue to be very serious.
Firstly
, there has been a large increase in physical
health
 including
headache
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 and lowered vision even reducing memory ability. During sleep, the brain forms connections that help
people
 process and remember new information. A lack of sleep can negatively impact both short and long-term memory. In terms of mental
health
 problems, sleep deprivation may lead to
moody
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 and depression. To illustrate, when the average time for resting does not reach 8 hours a day, the hormonal system would be
imbalance
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due to
 blocking hormone production. In conclusion, because of long working hours
as well as
 many distractions,
people
 are less well-sleeping than previous generations and
this
 directly affects both individuals and the modern community not only physically but
also
mental
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health
 around the world. Personally, I believe that
people
 should take care more about their
health
 in general and sleep
in particular
, which are the most important for a happy life.
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