The diagram below shows the production of ethanol oil from grain. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagram illustrates the several steps of how ethanol oil is being manufactured.
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,
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the figure, it can be seen that there are two products
as a result
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of manufacturing processes.
Firstly
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,
Grain
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which is harvested from the farm
,
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will be stored in
storage
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the storage
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and
then
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sent to
mill
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the mill
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at the
mililng
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milling
. After the
grain
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is milled, it will be sent to the cooking process, followed by liquefaction to turn the
grain
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into water. The liquid needs to be fermented for a
while
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before sending them to separate the oil and solids in the distillation process. Fuel ethanol, a clean and clear liquid from the former methods, is now filled in the storages and sent to the fuel market
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. Solids which are called a wet distillers
grain
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will be sent into the dryer to get rid
off
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the remaining water within the
grain
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. As the
grain
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dried, it is now known as DDG (dry distillers
grain
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) ,
it
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and it
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will be moved to the feed market.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words grain with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • production
  • ethanol oil
  • grain
  • stages
  • cleaning
  • milling
  • fermentation tank
  • enzymes
  • fermentation
  • convert
  • starch
  • sugar
  • yeast
  • alcohol
  • distillation
  • separated
  • fermented mixture
  • dehydration
  • impurities
  • complex
  • multi-step
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