Write a letter to friend to inform them of a celebration you are having for a recent job promotion.Include information about The promotion The celebration Their accommodation.
Dear Nesa,
Surprisingly, I will have
been
Unnecessary verb
apply
a news
about my job that you will Remove the article
news
a piece of news
have been
so happy about
that because you Wrong verb form
be
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
was be
happy Change the verb form
was
to
me when I Change preposition
for
have
progress in life.you know I so Verb problem
made
try
to Wrong verb form
trying
take
Verb problem
get
this
job and I spend all the time for improvement
my work so I have Wrong verb form
improving
job
promotion .My lovely friend , I decided to Correct article usage
a job
get
Verb problem
apply
a
celebrate Correct article usage
apply
for
Change preposition
apply
this
success I like be
so incredible and amazing .I want every one wear Wrong verb form
being
the
blue and navy blue clothes and everywhere Correct article usage
apply
design
with Wrong verb form
designed
balloon
and white flowers . Fix the agreement mistake
balloons
according to
I love lilium
I Change the capitalization
Lilium
prefer
use it more than the other one .I think serve different food for main cores Add the particle
prefer to
such
as sea food
,Correct your spelling
seafood
stake
,caviar,Correct your spelling
steak
turkey
and appetizers are avocado salad ,some finger food and Correct word choice
and turkey
for
desserts are tiramisu ,strawberry tart ,Change preposition
apply
blueberry
cake . about drink I don’t know what serves so I want you Correct word choice
and blueberry
tolled
to me .Since I remember you Verb problem
to talk
explain
about your home and Wrong verb form
explained
tolled to
me you have a big house and you
had been suggesting if I have a celebration , I can use your salon home . now I want to ask your
permission to host Verb problem
told
this
party .
I know you are so happy like me and you will help me organize the party better by given
your
suggestion . thank you very much for your help and support
Your friend MaryamChange the form of the verb
giving
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clarity
Consider using simpler, clearer sentences to make your message more easily understood by the reader.
grammar
Be attentive to using the correct tenses for your verbs to enhance the accuracy of your writing.
tone
Try to maintain a more formal tone consistently throughout the letter, as it will contribute to a more appropriate presentation of your message.
engagement
It's great that you are thinking of including your friend in the planning process. Make sure to also ask for their opinion, making the letter feel more interactive.
engagement
Your enthusiasm about the promotion and the celebration is clearly conveyed, engaging the reader.
detail
You did a good job of providing details about the celebration, making your planning and excitement evident.
The Closing
The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.
Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.
Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)
- Yours faithfully,
Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)
- Yours sincerely,
Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)
- Best regards,
- Warm wishes,