Robots and artificial intelligence are being developed to replace humans in the workplace Why is this happening? Do you think this will have a positive or negative impact on society?

Nowadays, because of the development of
robots
and AI, some
people
presume that they might interchange humans in the place of working. From
this
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viewpoint, I think one of the main causes of
this
problem is that technology is now more popular and useful in human society,
however
, it
also
has a negative effect on
people
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life. In today's technological era, many scientists and programmers are trying to improve the application of
the
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robots
, which can help a lot for human life.
Such
as technology helps businesses or factories produce a huge number of products, which is more productive and minimises time rather than workers.
Besides
, using machines costs less price for businesses but the products are driven quickly to the customers. Like
Amazon
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online shopping mall,
robots
are mostly used to carry heavy items or even arrange the type of the product with a little help from
human
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and it is
also
convenient, cheaper and faster.
Although
artificial intelligence and
robots
offer many benefits for humans, they
also
create a negative aspect to them. In the near future, many
people
will in unemployed or
be
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excommunicated because
robots
replace them even
their
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long period
working
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in
business
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.
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, in
Vietnam
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many factories dismiss their employees when the machines are used in working. In short, thanks to the improvement of technology, human life is more convenient and comfortable, but it poses another threat to humans as
people
will be unemployed.
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